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21 OUT WOOT!

Post by DQMJ4Ever-NeverPlayedHalo on Sun May 18, 2008 12:42 pm

YAY! As promised, I released chapter 21 to catch up for my lost writing time! Yay! Ok, so in this chapter , we focus pretty much all on Sandarus, with one extremely creepy part, that you may not want to read if you get scared easily...Well what the heck am I saying, OF COURSE you want to read a creepy part! We also go to Regius, not much is happening but there is a small joke added just to make the chapter longer and happier, as it's pretty grim from there on out, lol. I always try to balance my chapters, so if there's a boring part, for example, a description on gfhii culture, I make it up with comedy or action or drama. Anyway, here it is! READ IT NOW!

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Chapter 21








` You may have forgotten about old
Sandarus, but yet the man is still there. Unfortunately, he still had not
arrived in Rilos by the time that Hogar had given Zuthis to the healer, so he
was in a rather grumpy mood. He had given up running, now just walking and
trying to think of something to do, rarely resting, and even more rarely
setting up camp. Then again, he wasn’t sure if he himself even wanted to get to
Rilos. That man was going to kill him when he got there. But it wasn’t his
fault. The arrow…He did not intend to release it. He did admit that he had lost
his temper, but still, he was not going to kill Hogar over it. The thing that
had caused him to release the arrow…it was not intentional. It was because of
the figure that he now believed was Zuthis. But…The face had not been that man’s
face at first. It had been another’s. It had been Falcun’s. How and why were
beyond him, and he curse himself, fully believing that he was facing the first
steps to insanity. Hog could not kill him, he reasoned, because he saved his
life, and either way, he would explain to him why he had released the arrow.
But then again, he continued, this entirely depended on Zuthis’ survival or
not. He was fully prepared to return to Dreadnar before he even met Hog if he
heard of the man’s death beforehand. As he was thinking about all this, another
thing popped into his mind. The cloak that the man had been wearing. It was the
exact same color as Falcun’s. Then, something else came into mind too. The
cloak of the man he had assaulted to save Hog was identical as well. Then,
something hit him. He remembered now. Why, a few days ago, he had been paralyzed
when he saw the thief and Hogar had to pick him up and save his life in turn.
That face had also been Falcun’s. He clutched his head and stopped walking,
collapsing to the ground. How could he be going insane? Was it the grief of his
brother’s death? Or…the guilt? He almost started to cry, and didn’t know what
to do. How could he continue if he was insane? He was damn sure he was, because
dead people don’t reappear a few times after they die. He remembered vaguely of
how he had first found Falcun deathly injured on the street, a pale man in a
black cloak running towards him and calling out. Did that man do it to him? Was
it his fault? “Who knows,” he said bitterly to himself, getting up and
continuing to walk, “the damned man could be on the other side of the continent
by now. I’ll never find him.” Sandarus was wrong, as you probably know. The man
in the black cape was far from where Sandarus said, and he was also wrong about
probably never finding him again. Because it just so happens there’s a healer
in Rilos with a black cape identical to the one mentioned previously.








As Regius collapsed into his chair
once again after a rather long marathon job after the prize-giver, he was
determined to let people speak from now on. The man had fortunately forgiven
Regius, and had understood the stress he was under and how many healers had
approached him in recent times. Although the man had ‘forgotten’ to give him
the wine, he was not greatly disappointed. Suddenly, a crash interrupted his
thoughts. A man had just collapsed on a table near him. However, the man had
not been in the room a few seconds ago. Nor did it look like he had. His clothes
were ripped, and it looked like he had not seen nourishment for days. Regius
walked up to him hastily, ordered food and drink for the man, and waited. When
the man was ready to discuss what had happened, the king accepted it with grim acknowledgement.
He gave the man enough coin to let him live out the rest of his life wealthily
(but, who knows how long that will be, Regius added under his breath). The news
was not good, however. It was actually very bad. Sighing, he brought up a
servant and her to set up a meeting with the royals in the area. Might as well
be ready for one, reasoned Regius. When the meeting started several hours later,
Regius made sure to close all the windows first.








The rows of guard and captains lined
up to honor the dead man. They all wore, instead of black, the bright red color
of Falcun’s cloak. Sandarus was among them, and wearing his dark blue cape, he
felt uneasy. The ceremony began, and, after the grim music, one by one, they
approached the body and said a prayer of respect or a message to the one who
passed away. Sandarus was last, because funerals made him uncomfortable. When
he approached the body, he recoiled in horror to discover that the dead man was
actually his brother, Falcun. But looking closer, he realized it was not
Falcun, but Zuthis, his face deathly pale, an arrow and a sword protruding his
body. Stepping back in horror and disgust, he looked around to discover that
the other people had deathly white skin as well. They all began to walk towards
him in a hypnotic fashion. They then stopped a few feet away, and suddenly,
Hogar appeared. He was followed by Zuthis and Falcun. Falcun had his eyes shut
the way Sandarus had last seen him, and, to his horror, Zuthis no longer had
the arrow or the sword in his body, but now there was just two, great, gaping holes.
He reached out and moved his arm through it in amazement, but suddenly, the
wounds healed and Sandarus’ arm was trapped in Zuthis’ body. He tried to pull
is out in horror, and suddenly, it came out, but looking at it, he realized
that his arm was now dead, as was Zuthis and Falcun. They began moving towards
him again, and, looking closer, he saw the king as well. They were all dead.
Killed by his sword and arrow. He ran in terror, but when he reached the gate,
he acknowledged that it was shut. Then, looking again, it was not shut, it actually
was not there at all, but a huge, massive chasm. Looking down through it, he
saw dimly at the bottom a bone dagger. He tried to reach it, but his arm was
too short. He turned around, and was gazing into the eyes of Falcun. Only,
there weren’t any eyes. Just empty sockets. Them the rest of them approached.
They had no eyes as well. Only he had eyes, but then, his too fell out, rolling
on the floor into the abyss. Then, the lifeless corpses raised one hand,
pointed at him, and began to laugh. It was a cold, terrifying laugh. An insane
laugh. Sandarus looked around, trying to escape. Then, he began to scream.
Only, it wasn’t a scream, it was an insane, horrifying laugh like the rest. He
tried to shut his mouth, but Falcun walked up and ripped his mouth open, so he
could not stop. He clutched his head, begging it to stop. He began to pull out
his hair, only one clump wouldn’t come out. He pulled and pulled, and finally
it gave away, but he noticed in terror that he had also pulled out his own
head. Then, Hogar walked up and took the head away. He could still see,
however. He saw them all standing there, his head in Hogar’s hands, laughing.
His head was laughing as well, even without a mouth. He then looked back down at the dead hand
that was attached to his arm. It had begun to rot. It suddenly came to life and
grabbed a sword from out of the king’s body, and gutted Sandarus with it.
Sandarus collapsed, dead, but then rose again, among the ranks of the bodies,
and began to laugh.






He woke up screaming and in a cold
sweat. Clutching his head in his hands (gently), he cursed himself for these
horrific dreams that had began to plague him the past day or so. No matter what
he did, they always came back. And, as if this was not enough, the dreams were
always new, and each more terrifying then the last. He put his head in his
hands, but suddenly he felt something drop into them. Looking down in his
hands, he saw two eyes. He began to scream again, as white bodies began to
appear around him. They all started laughing. Determined to endure this dream,
he stuck his hand in the fire, to prove himself wrong. He withdrew it in a yell
of pain that was actually laughter. His hand did not become burnt, however. It
had become deathly white, and the whiteness started to spread from his hand to
his whole body. Cursing the flame, he was stunned to see that it was not actually
the color of fire, but a deathly white with a blue-ish hue. Sandarus realized in horror something that he
had feared from the moment he had woken up. It had not been a dream. It was
real.


























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Post by DQMJ4Ever-NeverPlayedHalo on Tue May 20, 2008 4:50 pm

Aw man, what's happening to this site? No one is on nymore! Well, it's kinda exam season, ain't it? So I'll let it pass for now. Just mad that no one is on because I want to know what people think of my novel to far. I mean, it's been five posts of all me (not that you didn't like it >_> lol) !!! Any one like my new sig? It's from Paper Mario: Thousand Year Door, the best game ever period, I DO NOT CARE WHAT YOU THINK (Denying barrier-Do not approach-Denying barrier) Ok I'm done, lol xD. How do you copyright something? A little bit of trouble, no? Can you just snap your fingures (leave me alone, I forgot how you spell fingers.... OH WAIT I JUST GOT IT, LOL!) and say it's copyrighted and leave it so? Or do you have to like, make it legalized somehow, and isn't that a bit of a stretch? Well, if not, I AM OFFICIALLY:

COPYRIGHTING THE SHADOW CHANELLER, BY DQMJ4EVER-NEVERPLAYEDHALO3 (breath) PLEASE DO NOT POST IT ANYWHERE WITHOUT MY PERMISSON (copying from kamo's words, I don't think those are copyrighted xD)Oh, wait. Nevermind, HELL POST THIS WHEREVER YOU WANT, I WANT PPL TO KNOW I WROTE IT, THAT'S ALL, LOL.


Ok, so, lol, now that i got my extra energy outa the way, i got one more thing to say. Uh, I was thinking of making one of the admins (Digger, lol) to delete all my posts of chapters, and I'll just smhack chapter 1-20 in one uber post at the begining, making it much easier, and I'll do that when I reach chapter 40, which, by then, I'll hopefully have more readers, etc. Any takers? I think It'll be a lot easier. Gonna go play oblivion. I just became a master of conjuration and a pissed off a guard, got the whole fregin watch on my $@#, Then summoned a Dremora lord (=Super baddy demon xD) and pwned them all! Now my bounty is at 11,000,000 bucks, but no guard is stupid enough to get near me because they know I'll make fire lightning and ice rain down apon them while a giant demon aligator eats them xD. Man, it's damn good to be a mage. I'd like to see a warrior take on 10 highly-armored super-men that are 20 levels above you on his own xD. GO ME, WOO! Ok, so, bye, and answer a few of my questions. By the way (looks at kamo) I did copyrighted thing as a joke, I'm saying it now, so I don't really care, capiche? Wow, a lotta writing, but, heck, I got nothing better to do. Anyway, lol, HALO OUT!




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Post by Digger412 on Thu May 29, 2008 6:59 am

I'll delete 'em, I just want you to tell me if you have them saved first (I don't wanna delete them without you having some way to post them >.>). Anyways, I'm in the middle of CT-Intro atm, finished reading on what you've written. It sends a chill down my spine really o.O. I like it a lot, though, you've written it well.

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Post by DQMJ4Ever-NeverPlayedHalo on Fri May 30, 2008 5:58 am

yay! Lol, finally some opinion, and yes, i have them saved, i think...And if I don't...Crap xD. Lol, Going to check right now...Yep, got it. Ok, so Delete everything that I posted, if it has a chapter in it, and I'll do chapter 1-20. Oh yeh, don't delete chapter 21, because I'll do a group from 21-40 when I get there. So only 2-20. Because I'll add it in post one. Thanks a lot digger. I'd do it myself but i cant delete my posts Sad That's stupid, I mean they're my posts and plus I'm a moderator. Wazzup wit that? -.- EDIT: DON'T DELETE CHAPTERS DIGGER! Chaptesr are too big to post in one OR two, and in more than that it's basically useless. Thanks for trying to help, though. Uh, does ny1 have opinion on the end of chapter 20, lol?

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Post by Digger412 on Sat May 31, 2008 5:35 pm

The worst thing happened to me today--my RS account was hacked. Someone got on it, advertised a fake site, and got my account banned. I made an appeal, though, so I *finally* got it unbanned, but now I have to wait for it to be unlocked, since it was banned....this really sucks..don't even know if any of my stuff is left :'( Sad Sad Sad Sad Sad Sad Sad Sad Sad Sad

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Post by DQMJ4Ever-NeverPlayedHalo on Sat May 31, 2008 6:26 pm

Wow, that must really suck, sorry dude. I remember how many dang times i got hacked on D2, it's so hard to get good stuff on there. Ah well, eh? It happens. Just a game though, so be happy =D. I know youre mad, though, i was (and would be, lol) if that happened to me. Oh well. Where the guacamole is kamo Sad?

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Post by Digger412 on Sun Jun 01, 2008 11:43 am

Don't know. I've been talking to her dad, though.

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Post by DQMJ4Ever-NeverPlayedHalo on Sun Jun 01, 2008 1:15 pm

Uh... (steps away from Digger) ok?

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Post by Digger412 on Mon Jun 02, 2008 8:32 am

I talk to him over RuneScape...atleast I did until my acc...well, ya know.. Sad . The unlock request is still pending. Anyways, since I haven't talked to him for a couple of days, I don't know what's going on..I really do hate the free-to-play lowlifes...just because I look like a level 11 doesn't mean that (when I get my acc back) I couldn't pwn all of them..

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Post by DQMJ4Ever-NeverPlayedHalo on Mon Jun 02, 2008 12:45 pm

Ah, well that sucks. Play Age of mythology the titans. You don't really have anything to lose, so a new account every so often isn't bad (ask kiro, kamo's brother, lol I've had like 25 accounts) and the games are so fun. They include soccer, dodgeball, and so many amazing things. I'm pissed that I don't have it anymore though. Uber scratch trashed it, and I spent all my money on wii fit, WHICH PWNS!!! lol. Or, maybe, oblivion, which is rated M (strangely, in canada, its T...) but pwns and has nothing really bad, so i dont know why its rated that...Anyway, yeh, I hope you get your account back. I've never been into runescape, dono why =D

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Post by Digger412 on Mon Jun 02, 2008 1:32 pm

Woot! 100th reply! lol. Anyways, I saw a commercial about the Wii fit. Umm...how'd ya get soccer, etc. out of AOM? lol

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Post by DQMJ4Ever-NeverPlayedHalo on Tue Jun 03, 2008 2:48 pm

rofl...Mountain giant kicking dwarfs lm&$o ITS SO FUN AND FUNNY ROFL! IM SO MAD I DONT HAVE IT NYMORE! I MUST GET IT AGAIN! LOL ITS SO FUN TO KICK DWARFS! Oh, you can also meteorite them in other games. Dogeball:trolls, cyclops throwing dwarfs, or fire giants. Dwarfs are just so damn fun to pwn. Meteor dodge is uber too. Meteor dodge:set meteors to 1 shot KO, and you gotaa avoid them while you kill others, KINDA choatic in groups or 5 or 6, rofl get Aot, it's like one of the funner games. I plan to get it, but i blew my fortune on a new Ds (other one broke, :/) and then Wii fit, so itll be a few months if i really want it. Wii fit is fun, but man, im sore. Dang yoga is really extreme, lol.

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Post by Digger412 on Wed Jun 04, 2008 9:33 am

Look here. Then find which one is yours (the sticky lol) and then look at the replies. Anyways, have fun with the dwarves o.O. Oh! Got my RS acc unlocked, but now I can't remember the pass so I have to wait another hour or so...>.<. Oh, I also got the Iron Man game for PS2. It's okay, not worth $30 imho though..

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Post by DQMJ4Ever-NeverPlayedHalo on Wed Jun 04, 2008 3:35 pm

Ps2? Wow, i feel sorry for you, no wonder you play runescape O.o, lol. Yeh, aom rocks. anyway, arent we talking about novels here? -.-

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Post by Digger412 on Thu Jun 05, 2008 4:12 am

I'm waiting for you to post a new chapter ;P

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